Alright, I did it.
https://abantiquo.aldergate.net/viewtop ... =17&t=3314
Challenge: Writing As A Hostile Act
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Yawa
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hell yeah you did!! thank you for the submissionLouvain wrote: ↑Sat Jul 27, 2024 8:49 pmAlright, I did it.
https://abantiquo.aldergate.net/viewtop ... =17&t=3314
MAHORELA. AMANDINE. DE DRAAK. SCHIARAFFA
A KNIFE THAT DOESN'T KNOW WHERE TO GO IS A BLADE WASTED;
A VAMPIRE WITHOUT PURPOSE IS A PARASITE
A KNIFE THAT DOESN'T KNOW WHERE TO GO IS A BLADE WASTED;
A VAMPIRE WITHOUT PURPOSE IS A PARASITE
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All right. Go off. Love the style. Seyda’s voice is so forceful in this. Succinct, clear. And I love the way “FACT:” at the beginning of every section makes you sit up and pay attention.Seyda wrote: ↑Sat Jul 13, 2024 9:54 amHere you go!
https://abantiquo.aldergate.net/viewtop ... =17&t=3289
And the hint of softness toward the end? Mwah. Like getting slapped and then stroked on the cheek and then slapped again.
Thank you so much for the read.
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MAHORELA. AMANDINE. DE DRAAK. SCHIARAFFA
A KNIFE THAT DOESN'T KNOW WHERE TO GO IS A BLADE WASTED;
A VAMPIRE WITHOUT PURPOSE IS A PARASITE
A KNIFE THAT DOESN'T KNOW WHERE TO GO IS A BLADE WASTED;
A VAMPIRE WITHOUT PURPOSE IS A PARASITE
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Yawa
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“Be kind or else” is such a strong damn line to end on and one of those pithy multimeaning things so choice in a manifesto. The image of scratching at tattoos is really vivid and made me physically wince. Made me ask: six showers? Why six?
The narrator voice is skirting around an issue and being vague about something like James himself is looking sideways at this Thing that happened to him. Like even now he can’t explain it to himself? Really interesting choices in the language here dude.
Thank you heaps for the read!
MAHORELA. AMANDINE. DE DRAAK. SCHIARAFFA
A KNIFE THAT DOESN'T KNOW WHERE TO GO IS A BLADE WASTED;
A VAMPIRE WITHOUT PURPOSE IS A PARASITE
A KNIFE THAT DOESN'T KNOW WHERE TO GO IS A BLADE WASTED;
A VAMPIRE WITHOUT PURPOSE IS A PARASITE
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Yawa
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HECK yeah. Thank you for the submission!!
MAHORELA. AMANDINE. DE DRAAK. SCHIARAFFA
A KNIFE THAT DOESN'T KNOW WHERE TO GO IS A BLADE WASTED;
A VAMPIRE WITHOUT PURPOSE IS A PARASITE
A KNIFE THAT DOESN'T KNOW WHERE TO GO IS A BLADE WASTED;
A VAMPIRE WITHOUT PURPOSE IS A PARASITE
Childe of the Great Eye Collector
And when the world grows still and you feel a chill
Just know I'm there, cause I'm your ghost, cause I'm your ghost
Just know I'm there, cause I'm your ghost, cause I'm your ghost
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OOOOO thankZach wrote: ↑Wed Jul 31, 2024 12:10 amhttps://abantiquo.aldergate.net/viewtop ... 196#p55196
why the hell not, lol.
MAHORELA. AMANDINE. DE DRAAK. SCHIARAFFA
A KNIFE THAT DOESN'T KNOW WHERE TO GO IS A BLADE WASTED;
A VAMPIRE WITHOUT PURPOSE IS A PARASITE
A KNIFE THAT DOESN'T KNOW WHERE TO GO IS A BLADE WASTED;
A VAMPIRE WITHOUT PURPOSE IS A PARASITE
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The start of this is so relatable, rewatching Rent at 3:30 in the morning because you don't have the brain cells to watch anything new. Felt as fuck. I love seeing vampires and werewolves and other supernaturals being Just People. I think a lot of players write slice of life stuff in between the bloodshed and the conflict and the big, sometimes dramatic arcs that they introduce. We forget that there are also a lot of really good emotional beats you can hit with small quiet moments of contemplation like this one. This feels so cozy and even hopeful! Thank you for the read <3Sapphira wrote: ↑Wed Jul 24, 2024 10:53 pmhttps://abantiquo.aldergate.net/viewtop ... =17&t=3307
enjoy~
H I S T O R I A ❂ M A G I S T R A ❂ V I T A E
MAHORELA ❂ AMANDINE ❂ DE DRAAK ❂ SCHIARAFFA
there's beauty in your beast
MAHORELA ❂ AMANDINE ❂ DE DRAAK ❂ SCHIARAFFA
there's beauty in your beast
Okie dokie; I'm doin' it! Submitting this bit as an official entry:
The Long Road To Anywhere But Home - Sawyer
The Long Road To Anywhere But Home - Sawyer
